First sight 1 (hiei story: yyh: gurls only ) fixed

*ur in a big city and its nightime. u r chasing a big Wind demon.*
~quiz start~
as u r chasing him he turns into a deep dark ally way. just as ur about to turn the corner u hear someone shout "SPIRIT GUN!" and the ally was filled with a blinding light.........
what are u thinking?
what the hell was that!?!
*not thinking any thing ur too shocked*
*looking around panicy* wasn't me!!
*go around the corner no mater what*
as u look down the ally u see big holes in the building next to u. *WTF* u think. all of a sudden u hear voices ((me:no ur not going crazy)) and see four figures sillueted against the remaining smoke. then about 30sec later one leaves or u think he does because he just vanishes into the air. u look around for the demon u were chasing and can't find him *crap! (u think. had taken u 3 weeks to find him)* u turn around disapointed when u see a small figure with red eyes, running extreamly fast towords u . he he brings his sword out and up for a swing at u and u wisk out ur katana and block it. he halts in surprise then dissapers again behind u. u yelp in surpprise and start looking wildly around u when u feel an emensly sharp pain at the base of your neck. the last thing u hear is someone shouting "hey guys I got her," he gently flips u over and wispers "finally I have found u...." and u fade into the welcome darkness
what just happened...*compleatly lost*
wtf! shorty here just knocked me out?!?
falala *not paying attention
..........what just happened? I haven't done any thing ....yet
*u wake up around an hour later with 3 people in your vision* (kuwabara,kurama, and yuske(SP))((me:sorry I don't know how to spell thier names))
anyways u start to get up and kuwabara \pushes u back down. "get away from me!" u scream. u blast them with a fire ball (which knocksout kurama and yuske) then u freeze time and run (leaving them and a terrified kuwabara behind) as soon as u think ur safe u unfreeze it.
(back with the group) Hiei teleports back to the group (b/c he went to see koenma)and sees kuwabara curled on the ground shaking next to an unconsious yuske and kurama. hiei nudges kurama with his foot and wakes him up "what happend kurama?"
"basically she woke up and kuwabara scared the shit outta her so she trew a fire ball at us and thats the last thing I remember."
"it was freaky! she just disappered into thin air!" kuwabara shouted
"hn, so in other words u guys forgot that she was a demon. well kurama lets go get her... kuwabara take yuske and meet us at koenmas."
(back with u)
(as u run u r thinking to urself) *I can't go home they would probably expect that* u look around and notice that u r deep in the woods. *great now I'm lost* u think then u feel eyes at ur back. u turn around; nothings there. u walk a bit farther and freeze time. u look over ur shoulder and see two people (or rather demons)
one is about and inch taller than u with black clothing and gravity defying hair. *hey thats the guy who knocked me out* u realise then u look at the other guy
he has long (mid-back) red hair and emerald eyes
he's holding a beautiful red rose. suddenly u see the short one moving twords u "u are getting on my nerves he says" u take out your kantana as he rushes u......
~Quiz end~ sorry guys have to go plz message and rate if u want the second one
fine hurry up and make the second one!!
what ever I really don't care ((me: well I tried T_T))

hiei is suspisious of u but its probably cause he doesn't know u yet!! *u don't even know his name *