The Vampire Demon- a YuYu Hakusho story

Alright this is my first story/quiz and I'd really appreciate it, if you all can let me know if you like it or not. Or, maybe, tell me what I have to do to make it better. Now, onward! Since it's best to be original when making a quiz, I thought it would be cool if you were 1/3 fire demon, 1/3 vampire, and 1/3 elf. What do you think of this?
vampires are cool, but what's with the elf part?
it's interesting. Never seen a combo like that...
Oh great. People will make fun of me for being short.
It was a forbidden night. A night when two different species loved eachother and created one of the strongest beings to ever walk the Earth... 16 years later you, Miyuki Manazaru are on a new mission. From your sources you have discovered where newbie vampires are going for blood. And so, you wait silently behind a bush, prepared for whats to come. Soon the quiet was getting on your nerves. You wanted to fight, do anything that would relieve the tension from inside you. "This is weird" you say to yourself, realizing that you, in fact, were the only person there. "If demons and vamps are taking a break, that means all hell is gonna break loose." You look at your surroundings to make sure you were in the right place. All of a sudden, you feel the cool rush of someone hitting the back of your head. Everything goes dark...
damn, the quiz barely started and I'm already knocked out
who did that?!? I'm gonna KILL em'!!
*singing* I'm a BARBIE girl, In a BARBIE world...
*YYH gang's P.O.V* "Koenma, what's the problem? Botan had this face I've never seen" Yusuke says as he and the gang walk into Koenma's office. "That's because this is serious" the prince of Spirit World replied. "There's been a kidnap" Kuwabara then declares that "we've done this before" He was thinking of Yukina. "Yes but that didn't include vampires" Koenma frowned. "vampires? they aren't real." "As a matter of fact, they do exist, Yusuke. They have been around for centuries." informed Kurama. "Of course they have. But, you don't expect him to know that, even though he's died and come back to life" Hiei stated from the corner of the room. "Oh yeah? I'll show you something to expect. My fist in your face" Yusuke retorted. " Please. I'm asking you all to pay close attention on this mission. It is very important that you locate and rescue this girl" A picture of you appears on the screen above Koenma's head. Silver hair just above your waist, one green eye, one red eye, that's your appearance. What's your opinion?
Cool.
two words disturb-ing! (Me: that's one word You: shut up!)
"I've prepared a portal to send you where she is being kept. Good luck." As Koenma said this, the boys walked to the old, abandoned building where you were being held captive...
finally, MY point of view!
when they get here I'll kill them!
*Your P.O.V* You awake to find yourself chained to a wall inside, what seemed to be, a dungeon. Candles were at every corner of the room but you can barely see your hand in front of your face. " I see your awake" came a voice. "Who's there?" you question, looking around the room to see where it came from. "Who else? I am your kidnapper." With that said you now know it 's a male. "That is quite obvious. What do you want with me?" "Just you, my princess" The man revealed himself. You could tell, by his fangs, that he is a vampire. "princess? I am but a mere elf" His laughter quickly filled the room. He walks closer to you and says "You don't fool me. I sense royal blood in you. You are Princess Miyuki. Princess of the Vampires"...and the END! Please RATE and if you want MESSAGE! Remember the higher the rating the faster I update! Seeya!
WHAT?!? (Me: ehehe, calm down)

You've been kidnapped by some weird vampire guy, who claims you're a princess. Great, can your life get any better? Well, actually, yes it can! The YYH gang is coming to save you and hopefully one will fall in lover with the Vampire Princess...